Words to be used in writing: red, ladder, sinking, pavement, coins
I was two and I was in the public outdoor pool having fun, as always, when it happened. My arm floaty popped! I was being watched by my parents but they were on their phones again. I was still floating lopsidedly when the other one popped. I starting sinking! The lifeguard with the red vest just walked laps up and down the pavement. I tried to swim to the ladder, but I couldn’t. Finally, my dad glanced up. He frantically rushed to save me . After I was safe and dry, my dad passed me some coins. I bought an ice-cream.
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Mr G, Sheffield, UK (Team 100WC) · 11 March 2019 at 6:17 am
Ooo, what a scary situation that must have been Michelle! I love the way your opening sentence draws us into the story by not giving anything away and encouraging us to read on. Some good vocabulary choices in there too – ‘glanced’ and ‘frantically’ say so much more about the circumstances.
What lessons do you think the characters in this story should have learned?
Well done and keep rising to the Challenge.
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