… but I had to see what was inside…

On the morning of a hot Summer’s day, I was playing outside with my mum and dad. We were having so much fun until suddenly boom, boom the clouds went with lightning and thunder poured among the town as we ran inside. Then suddenly Dad brought a box inside. I didn’t know what was in it. Mum asked if I could go to my room, so I went to bed. It was early in the morning, but I had to see what was inside the box. As I peeked into the box something licked me. Then I opened the whole box and it was a puppy!!!

Categories: 100 Word Challenge


CHRIS MEEHAN · 19 October 2020 at 8:04 am

Kia ora from New Zealand Michelle.
What a great surprise there was at the end of this story, although I was a bit worried thinking that the poor wee puppy had been stuck in the box for a whole night!
Perhaps you might start looking at where you can put your writing into paragraphs in the future so that it is easier to read for your audience.
Keep up the good writing and if you get a chance, come along to our class blog at: https://rakau19.edublogs.org/
Ms M #100WC

CHRIS MEEHAN · 19 October 2020 at 8:16 am

Oh dear! My apologies! I have made a comment, but said it was for Michelle, when I should have said CARTER!

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